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2011级(2)班[毕业] 林家明 2011-12-06 13:23 阅读(354) 评论(3) 英语作文

  Today is sunny today.I usually gets up at 6:15a.m.I'm do homework at 7:00a.m.I'm eat breakfast at 7:30a.m.We had lunch there . We ate hamburgers and some drinks , but I know they are not healthy and not good for us . Then we played some games . At 8:00p.m I goes to park every day.At 9:00p.m.I'm go home.We were all fell tired ,but we were very happy ! It was great fun!Please write and tell me about your morning!

 

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同学:张澄轩 评论于 2011/12/7 22:03:11 
老师 批我的作文啊

同学:林家明 评论于 2011/12/6 21:50:34 
哦!知道了!可能我错把后面的今天所做的打成了过去时,应该是我得本子上写错了,才导致这样的原因!
教师:谢七妹 评论于 2011/12/6 16:23:56 
Good! "I'm do homework at 7:00a.m.I'm eat breakfast at 7:30a.m."应该是  "I do homework at 7:00a.m. I eat breakfast at 7:30a.m." 还有前面用一般现在时,介绍的是日常情况,后面转而用一般过去时,似乎是在记述过去一天所做的事情,中间没有过渡,似乎有点....