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I have a happy family

2013级(9)班[毕业] 林诗雨 2013-10-01 21:53 阅读(198) 评论(5) 英语作文

      Hello everybody.My Chinese name is LinShiYu.My English name is Cindy.I have a happy family.There are four people in my family,my father ,my mother,my brother and me.My father is 165 cm tall.He is an accountant.He works in a bank.My mother is 158 cm tall.She is a salesperson.She works in a bookstore.My brother is young.He is only seven.He is a student.He likes watching TV.I'm twelve years old.I'm a student,too.I study in No.2 Middle School.We are happy everyday.So,I like my family.I like my mother,father and my brother. 

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同学:陈芷晴 评论于 2013/10/4 14:56:41 
Good!This is a happyiness family.
同学:张卓雅 评论于 2013/10/3 0:12:02 
同学:刘秋余 评论于 2013/10/2 8:00:54 
同学:洪骥晋 评论于 2013/10/1 22:24:34 
  文章先介绍了自己,再以“I have a happy family”作为文章中心句,介绍父母的内容形成对称句式,接着介绍弟弟,接着再详细介绍自己,补充开头,使文章结构、内容更为紧凑,最后总结了“我”在这个家庭的美好感觉。给人营造了一个温馨、和谐的家庭氛围。
教师:张春苗 评论于 2013/10/1 21:57:36 
There are four people in my family. She is a salesperson.   We are happy every day.