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2013级(5)班[毕业] 黄泽泓 2013-10-04 13:57 阅读(258) 评论(2) 诗词鉴赏
I am Kingminle.I have a happy family.I have a sister, a grandma, a grandpa, a father, a mother on my family.My father is a teacher. He go to work by car.He is very funny。My mother is a nurse.She go to work by bike.My grandpa and my grandma is a farmer.I and my sister is a student .I love my family 

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同学:杨果林 评论于 2013/10/5 16:40:55 
 不错,我的评价和老师一样。还有一点就是标点符号用的不是很好。
教师:谢七妹 评论于 2013/10/4 15:52:16 
不错的作文,可惜放错了位置,再就是请注意第三人称单数和be动词与主语的搭配。
继续努力!、